I'm writing a script for my intro film production class, and I think it's going pretty well, but I'm not certain. Any constructive criticism I can get would be extremely helpful.

The assignment was to make an 8-10 page multi-scene script, from there we could do whatever we wanted. Here's what I have

http://www.geocities.com/rockhound107/Telemark3.doc

We've read our first draft, and my TA suggested this


Thanks in advance

Couldn't get your page to load. You can e-mail me [email protected] I'd like to read it.

To get it to load, click the link, then when the error message comes up, just go in the address bar, add a space, and then it should work

How about a wacky neighbor !?

"Listen, this is more important than any of your damn cheese. Someone's life hangs in the balance." is classic.

This is the wrong place to get constructive criticism. Were it up to most who make up this board your story would somehow include running zombies and other such nonsense. Why not try finishing it up on your own without ANY feedback?

Wasn't the board initially against the running zombies though?

It's actually pretty much done, I just want to get a lot of eyes on it before I turn it in.